1. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PLSvP-EbQrM&feature=youtu.be
2. A lot of the feedback I got on my second elevator pitch was positive. I was applauded for my eye contact as well as ideas and content. I was told that the improvements I sought to make in my second pitch definitely made a difference and that I should be happy with the overall product. The only improvement that was suggested to me was to take out my name and university at the beginning of the pitch because, as it was taught, nobody really cares about what our name is and it takes away from the time and hook.
3. Based on my feedback, I did not make many changes. I maintained my clothing/appearance and did not change my camera or camera angle. However, I made a small content/script change. I took out my name and personal introduction and simply replaced it with the hook I had been using all along. This way, I would be able to grab the reader's attention right from the beginning and not lose it until after the pitch was made. I thought all these changes were very constructive and I am satisfied with this product. Although it is the last pitch of this course, I know that as I show it to others and refine it further, it will get even better.
Hello Max,
ReplyDeleteI love how you spent the first part of your pitch describing the group of people who need your product. By doing this it was able to connect viewers who feel like they fall into this group to needing your product. This would be great to secure customers. The second aspect I really love is that you gave details, such as flavors, on your product. This can ensure investors that you have a developed idea and that you are fully committed to its success.
-Jordan Jacobs
Hi max,
ReplyDeleteGreat job on your third pitch, way to perfect it. I believe the minor changes you made, such as taking out your name introduction and script adjustments, actually turned out to be quite beneficial. All of it combined gave a greater sense of professionalism to your pitch and brought it together. Nice work.
Best,
Reed Blevins
Hello Max,
ReplyDeleteAgain, great job by submitting a well-paced and easy to follow delivery during the final Elevator Pitch. I enjoyed learning about the details of your product and why people should consider trying it. You also once again improved eye to eye contact with the camera during the whole pitch. I noticed that you did a great job at following the recommendations from your peers like removing your personal presentation in order to focus more on your product. Overall, I think you did a great job!
Sincerely,
Javier Felis Perez