1. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DBF6f-FINOU&feature=youtu.be
2. In summary, the feedback I received was fairly consistent. To begin with, everyone generally agreed that my content was good. The words I was speaking were good, but it was my delivery that needed to be fixed. First, a lot of people said I needed to engage the audience more by making more eye contact. Secondly, I needed to speak with more confidence in the product. Third, I needed to try to show the fact that the pitch was memorized and not being read off of a script.
3. Based on the feedback, I made one major change. In response, I memorized my script much more effectively. I put a camera at eye level so it was evident I am addressing my audience directly. Thus, with better eye contact and more fluid speaking, I was able to provide a better overall pitch.
Hello Max,
ReplyDeleteI think that your delivery was both well-paced and easy to follow. I really enjoyed listening all the details about your product and why people should consider buying it. I also think it was a smart move to include here all the favors that you plan to include in your offering. I also noticed that you improved the part of the speech regarding eye to eye contact with your customer. My only recommendation to you is to avoid mentioning your name at the beginning of your pitch for the next one. The professor said in class this was not the right way to do it and that’s why I am telling you this. Overall, I think you did a great job!
Sincerely,
Javier Felis Perez
Hey Max,
ReplyDeleteFirst and foremost I liked your video it was very clear and it seems that you took the critiques to heart and you were able to adapt your video. As your summary would say your delivery was much better than last time and you did a great job at memorizing the script. Overall I would say tht you did a great and your elevator pitch has improved well.
Best,
Austin Felter
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ReplyDeleteHi Max,
ReplyDeleteGreat job on your pitch, you delivered your opportunity in an understandable and well-paced fashion. You seemed comfortable and prepared. Your product has a lot of potential and I think it was clearly stated in the video. You did well to improve the things you wanted to and it made your elevator pitch much better than last time. Nice work.
Best,
Reed Blevins